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This is one of the beings Ingvar encounters after the Grims transport him to a dark dimension in Wytchfae Runes:
His primary attention was instantly riveted on the gold arrayed creature in the midst of her retinue. Queen of the Grims? Dressed in a trailing gown threaded throughout with gold, she gleamed like the sun, even in the dimly lit room. Ingvar’s belly clenched as he realized that in this place of promiscuous skin, the Queen displayed not an inch. Gloves of the same fabric as her gown decorated her hands, and a shimmering veil cascaded to obscure her hair. The golden mask that safeguarded her face, however, sent icy shards rippling down his spine. The mask conformed to the contours of her face, displaying full golden woman shaped lips, with a small oval hole in the center. Holes for sight and for breathing were also in evidence. Made of smooth gold metal, the mask transformed her into the eeriest of creatures. How hideous must she be to appear before him so completely shielded? He detected only her cold and merciless scrutiny.
This must be the week of golden creatures, lol. My HDH post was about my golden retired angel, though he is male and not nearly as mysterious as this Queen of the Grims. Lovely description, I can see her and her eerie-ness very clearly in my head. Great hook!
Intriguing. Good excerpt!
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C.
Oh, this builds the tension so well. I’m wondering together with him what she is like. I have a feeling that… he’s not far from the truth in his thoughts.
Nice description!
Wonderful hook…the tension builds so nicely. It left me wanting more.
Wonderfully creepy description! Gave me the chills.
Intense. So very creepy…
How mysterious and alluring. What must she look like indeed?!
Lovely description [plus “Promiscuous Skin” sounds like a 70s glam rock band]. Being watched by someone whose eyes are covered is such a tense thing. Very nicely done.
Ooh, what a chilling excerpt! Makes me very uneasy for poor Ingvar…
Very visual description of her and the place itself. Great hook!
Love the descriptions in this! Very fresh!
Nice building of tension 🙂
Oh my that is intriguing.
Such a sultry description – I could picture it so well, but I doubt she’s covering an ugly face!