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For a change of pace, the following conversation is from an untitled, unedited WIP:
She jumped as lightning cracked on the other side of the parking lot. Too close. Way too close. The harsh sound mirrored the raw jagged pain in her stomach. She felt the first drops splash on her face and peered into the darkness at the maze of cars. Where the hell had she parked? A door slammed and Rafe’s voice sounded behind her, calling her name. She ran headlong into the darkness, dodging around parked cars.
“Maddie, wait, dammit.” She heard him behind her. He grabbed her arm, and she shook it off, frantic to get away. He held on, despite the sheets of rain that blasted down on them.
“Let me go, you bastard!”
“Not until you listen. Look at me, Maddie.”
“Go back to your girlfriend.”
He urged her chin upward, but she stiffened her jaw. He bent down to her level. “Look. At. Me.”
Her eyes met his. The rain had plastered his hair, and even in the dim street light she could see the tension lines at the corners of his mouth. “Let me go, Rafe.”
“Come inside, baby, and let me explain. What you saw–it’s not what you think.”
Well if she saw what I think she saw…he’d better have a very ,very good explanation. Great Hook! 🙂
“What you saw–it’s not what you think.”
Sure, that’s what they all say…
The thunder and lightning really add to the frantic atmosphere of this scene. Wonderful job and great hook.
The weather enhances this wonderfully-written scene. Great hook! I want to know what his explanation is. 🙂
I like this! Will she hear him out? LOL!
You could feel the thunder, the rain…and her attempt to get away from him. Great hook!
It never is, is it?
Fab hook Flossie!
Great hook – I look forward to reading more 🙂
hm, I actually believe the guy that what she saw… could have a different explanation. An excellent, emotion filled snippet.
Nice hook. Great tension!
Sounds like he’s got his work cut out to convince her to listen to him. I hope he’s worth it. Gerat hook.
Great tension. I wonder how he’ll convince her.
You never know… it could’ve been his sister, lol. Great job. I really want to hear his explanation.
Sometimes things do have a perfectly good explanation…but if she saw him kissing someone else, it better be really, really good. 😉 Isn’t great when the weather cooperates with a scene? This was fantastic. Great hook!
Fabulous description, it really heightened the atmosphere of this scene. Great hook!
Oh, ho. “It’s not what you think.” Start groveling, Rafe!
I love the atmosphere you created here and the tension. Great hook
**snort** it’s never what we think! Hope he has a good explanation! Great hook, Flossie!